XenonDesigns Posted January 14, 2017 Share Posted January 14, 2017 Over a year ago I posted this concept of a redesign for a local high school and I've never been completely satisfied with it, so I decided to make another version. I'm looking for some C&C on the line work and colors. This is my first time working with Inkscape on a mascot so I'm just trying to make sure everything looks the way it should. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Broncoboy7 Posted January 14, 2017 Share Posted January 14, 2017 As someone who is formerly from New Mexico where Native American culture is big, this is really a nice redo. I like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XenonDesigns Posted January 16, 2017 Author Share Posted January 16, 2017 bump any other opinions? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bucknut42 Posted January 16, 2017 Share Posted January 16, 2017 I like this new version a lot. I went back and looked at the old one, and this is a huge upgrade. As far as this being your first mascot in inkscape, I think everything looks great. The line have good consistency, the gray shading is well placed, and the feathers are very well balanced. This is great work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whitefoot Posted January 16, 2017 Share Posted January 16, 2017 This is such an improvement. 3 things stick out at me: 1) The nostril is huge and it draws my eye's attention away from the amazing headdress. I seems very round for a side view of a face and it overlaps the upper lip (where a mustache would grow). Go with a more short-wide elliptical shape that stops at the bottom edge of the white part of the bottom of the nose. 2) The eye area. I can t put my finger on it, but the shape and shading doesn't feel natural to me. Too sharp and the lines are very straight where I would expect curves. 3) Think about a light grey skin tone rather than white. Maybe swap the skin color (grey) and the feather color (white). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stumpygremlin Posted January 16, 2017 Share Posted January 16, 2017 1 hour ago, Whitefoot said: This is such an improvement. 3 things stick out at me: 1) The nostril is huge and it draws my eye's attention away from the amazing headdress. I seems very round for a side view of a face and it overlaps the upper lip (where a mustache would grow). Go with a more short-wide elliptical shape that stops at the bottom edge of the white part of the bottom of the nose. 2) The eye area. I can t put my finger on it, but the shape and shading doesn't feel natural to me. Too sharp and the lines are very straight where I would expect curves. 3) Think about a light grey skin tone rather than white. Maybe swap the skin color (grey) and the feather color (white). I agree with the first and the last. The nostril doesn't need to be there. It'd presumably be hidden by the nose itself from that view. As far as skin tone, with the white skin and navy features, I almost get a black metal corpse paint look out of the face. That said, everything else is on point. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bruins Posted January 16, 2017 Share Posted January 16, 2017 This is great! Im actually from Braintree and see Wamps yard signs all the time, and this is a major improvement. Nice work But God demonstrates His own love toward us, in that while we were still sinners, Christ died for us. Romans 5:8/ Check Out My: Little Big League MLB Project/ Dribbble Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Captain Tsubasa Posted January 16, 2017 Share Posted January 16, 2017 Some of the outlines of the feathers are a bit too thick on the top of each feather. You can see that particularly at the feather on top of the B. It'll look nicer if you reduce the outlines. Edit: I agree with @Whitefoot that you should try to make the feathers white and the face grey. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
C-Squared Posted January 17, 2017 Share Posted January 17, 2017 I feel that the shadowing is not necessary at all and feels muddy the smaller the logo gets. My TeePublic Shop My Instagram Art Page Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XenonDesigns Posted January 17, 2017 Author Share Posted January 17, 2017 Here are some updates! Switched the feathers and face colors, updated the nose, made a few edits to the eyes and fixed some outlines in the head-dress. Minus shading The resolution might be low because the images are just screenshots. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Broncoboy7 Posted January 17, 2017 Share Posted January 17, 2017 Now that I get a closer look at it, the lips kind of make it look like a lady. Same with the eyes too. I'm not sure the best way to fix that would be, but see maybe if you could make that look more "manly". (No sexism intended here). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XenonDesigns Posted January 17, 2017 Author Share Posted January 17, 2017 27 minutes ago, Broncoboy7 said: Now that I get a closer look at it, the lips kind of make it look like a lady. Same with the eyes too. I'm not sure the best way to fix that would be, but see maybe if you could make that look more "manly". (No sexism intended here). Not too sure how to fix the lips but I'll experiment a bit. As for the eyes I'm guessing the detail at the top makes it look like feminine eyelashes. I'll try to work around that too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Broncoboy7 Posted January 17, 2017 Share Posted January 17, 2017 1 minute ago, XenonDesigns said: Not too sure how to fix the lips but I'll experiment a bit. As for the eyes I'm guessing the detail at the top makes it look like feminine eyelashes. I'll try to work around that too. I'm thinking you could maybe try opening its mouth, making it yell. It seems to be the trend with these types of logo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whitefoot Posted January 17, 2017 Share Posted January 17, 2017 The new grey face with the shading looks great. Wow! The "new" pointy part of the stroke where the nostril use to be needs to be moved down and left, so it is not pointing up. This will make the bottom of the nose more horizontal (I'd go with a slight negative slope {algebra} there rather then horizontal), and the upper lip closer to vertical (not vertical though). I hope you can understand what I mean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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