CreamSoda Posted December 9, 2009 Share Posted December 9, 2009 The perspective on his nose and mouth is off... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrianVlietDesign Posted December 9, 2009 Share Posted December 9, 2009 Not a bad concept overall. But, it looks too "minor league" to me. Nice job, though. NYCFC - MLS CUP CHAMPIONS - 2021 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-(dp)- Posted December 10, 2009 Author Share Posted December 10, 2009 Creamsoda, care to elaborate? I am not saying you are wrong, but if you are going to say it is wrong, could you tell me why? Goforbroke, as far as the upper part of the mouth not opening so far, think of this as more of an 'attacking' pose, rather than a 'roaring' pose. Here is another update. I made the eye a little less open, as well as cut down the number of separate shapes within the mane. I also added a wordmark this time, which I am not completely sold on yet. I tried to get a little bit of the 'circus' look from the old wordmark, while making sure it fit with this logo. I didn't especially want it to have the points on the side like the old one. Since I have a wordmark now, I did a quick field using the logos as well. As usual, C+C is appreciated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MikePho3niX Posted December 10, 2009 Share Posted December 10, 2009 Geez!! This was great to watch! From your little lion cub logo to this epic growth spurt! its amazing!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CreamSoda Posted December 10, 2009 Share Posted December 10, 2009 Ok,If you look at him from this angle, the front part of his snout would be higher and the then get lower the further away you look.Basically, the snout should slant the other direction. Right now it goes '/' while it should be going '\'its not a huge slant,like this Lion: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MikePho3niX Posted December 10, 2009 Share Posted December 10, 2009 LOL that horse is looking like " OMG WTF is going on. hes going to try and eat me again!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wasatch Posted December 10, 2009 Share Posted December 10, 2009 Seriously amazing work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-(dp)- Posted December 10, 2009 Author Share Posted December 10, 2009 Okay, here are some minor changes. Made the upper part of the mouth/nose angled down to the right a little bit, and made some changes to the jaw area. Nothing drastic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chestnutz Posted December 11, 2009 Share Posted December 11, 2009 Wow, looks worlds better than before. Great job. That shade of royal blue bothers me a little, but it's not too bad. erikas | go birds | dribbble Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CreamSoda Posted December 11, 2009 Share Posted December 11, 2009 Better but its still off.The distance from the closer eye to the mouth is shorter than the distance from the further eye to the mouth,that should be the opposite.basically you need to move the closer eye back to create a longer snout on that side... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-(dp)- Posted December 11, 2009 Author Share Posted December 11, 2009 Better but its still off.The distance from the closer eye to the mouth is shorter than the distance from the further eye to the mouth,that should be the opposite.In that case I should tilt it back the other way, right? It sounds like you are suggesting the opposite of what you did before, or I am just not understanding what you are saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
undead Posted December 11, 2009 Share Posted December 11, 2009 Wow, this has come a long way! Thanks for revisiting this concept. The latest incarnation is really spot on. Bravo. Portfoliobobschultz6' class="bbc_url">@bobschultz6 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CreamSoda Posted December 11, 2009 Share Posted December 11, 2009 Better but its still off.The distance from the closer eye to the mouth is shorter than the distance from the further eye to the mouth,that should be the opposite.In that case I should tilt it back the other way, right? It sounds like you are suggesting the opposite of what you did before, or I am just not understanding what you are saying.no, it just goes with what I was saying earlier.Objects closer to you in this perspective would be higher then the objects futher away.The closer eye needs to be above the farther eye, just like with the mouth.Take the pic of a lion i posted, then draw a horizontal line over from the bottom of his closer eye, you will see it is above the other eye.That is not the case with yours, creating a shorter snout on the side that is closest to you, which is backwards for proper perspective.Just remember that everything closer to you will be bigger than anything further away. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-(dp)- Posted December 12, 2009 Author Share Posted December 12, 2009 Alright, thanks. I changed that, and I think it made a big difference. Before, I couldn't get the eye to look right, they looked either too far apart or too close together no matter where I put them. I think the placement seems better now that I fixed the placement of the far eye. Thanks for clarifying, Creamsoda. Here is the latest version. The only things changed were the eyes/surrounding area. More comments would REALLY be appreciated. There seem to be only one or two after each update now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HarperK Posted December 12, 2009 Share Posted December 12, 2009 have you tried changing all the dark blue area to the normal lions' blue, and changing the lighter accent colors to silver? i think that might look greatEDIT: like this ʎɐqǝ uo pɹɐoqʎǝʞ ɐ ʎnq ı ǝɯıʇ ʇsɐן ǝɥʇ sı sıɥʇ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-(dp)- Posted December 12, 2009 Author Share Posted December 12, 2009 Yeah, I thought about it, but the silver highlights in the blue mane seem odd, and also seems to draw some attention away from the face. That is pretty much the only way to get rid of the third color, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HarperK Posted December 12, 2009 Share Posted December 12, 2009 Yeah, I thought about it, but the silver highlights in the blue mane seem odd, and also seems to draw some attention away from the face. That is pretty much the only way to get rid of the third color, though.yeah i def agree...i just thought it made it look more detroit lionsey:) ʎɐqǝ uo pɹɐoqʎǝʞ ɐ ʎnq ı ǝɯıʇ ʇsɐן ǝɥʇ sı sıɥʇ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
IWORSHIPBENDER Posted December 12, 2009 Share Posted December 12, 2009 Try putting more definition into the brow line to make it seem angrier. It looks like it's about get a filling. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goforbroke Posted December 13, 2009 Share Posted December 13, 2009 i have a technical suggestion. On a grey helmet I think the grey face gets lost and the attention goes to the mane instead of the face. I'd like to see it on a blue helmet and give the logo a white or silver stroke. That way the contract is helmet-face instead of helmet-mane. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brave-Bird 08 Posted December 13, 2009 Share Posted December 13, 2009 well this is all AMAZINGbut.where are z uniforms?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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