L-Train33 Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 What up guys? Ive been working on this logo for a little while and Im hoping the school will be using this permanantly. But before I finalize, I need some other opinions on it. Thanks everyone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ltravisjr Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 I really like the rendering of the head; its a shame it is lost a bit since it is so small in the logo. I would find a way to enlarge the falcon so the head fills more of the space in the shield (which has a lot of empty space as it is now). Then the talons could probably hang on or over the wordmark to integrate better with it. Since the wings span so far out, perhaps they could be cropped to inside the shield. I don't know, the elements are sure there - experiment a little. Oh yeah, the shield looks a little assymetrical to me - you might want to check that.LT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rcb05 Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 The shield does look asymmetrical, check that out.Also, you could probably get rid of some of the detail on the wings and created the same effect. I agree with pretty much everything the previous poster suggested. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
L-Train33 Posted July 20, 2006 Author Share Posted July 20, 2006 The shield is definately off. I was going for another design and forgot to make that even. I would like to make the falcon bigger, but I like the way the tail looks. But Ill play with it and see how it looks. I do and dont like the idea of the wings in the shield. I took me a long time to do the detail on the wings (why I dont like it) but it would be good cause I could make the falcon body bigger. Thanks for the advice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ltravisjr Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 The shield is definately off. I was going for another design and forgot to make that even. I would like to make the falcon bigger, but I like the way the tail looks. But Ill play with it and see how it looks. I do and dont like the idea of the wings in the shield. I took me a long time to do the detail on the wings (why I dont like it) but it would be good cause I could make the falcon body bigger. Thanks for the advice. I can understand the point about the wings. FWIW, I was thinking the wings might look good on a secondary logo, perhaps with the shield containing just "CHS" (or even "C" )and the wings coming off the shield. Just an idea I had, and I will admit my ideas don't always translate well in reality LT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fonz Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 Too much deadspace on the crest between the wings. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
L-Train33 Posted July 20, 2006 Author Share Posted July 20, 2006 Alright, I made some changes to make the shield more symetrical and smaller to reduce the blank space and I made the falcon bigger so you can see the detail better. More C&C please! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SportsLogo Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 I would make the feather tips of the wings more sharper and both wings shorter. Also, the shield just seems a bit stretched to me. I really like the face of the falcon and the wordmark though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyFriedRice Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 The wings look like they have scales.Not unlike Aquaman... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maz Posted July 20, 2006 Share Posted July 20, 2006 Make the wings shorter and it'll be perfect. Pittsburgh Arsenal - Elite Football League (NFL) - est. 2006Â Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wildwing64 Posted July 21, 2006 Share Posted July 21, 2006 I agree with some of the above posters. Just shorten the wings and perhaps make them a little less detailed, and you'll have a perfect logo! PotD:Â 24/08/2017 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
andrewharrington Posted July 21, 2006 Share Posted July 21, 2006 It's way too detailed. You want an icon, not an illustration. The box around the lettering probably isn't the best solution, either. I would explore some more innovative options here. I still don't have a website, but I have a dribbble now! http://dribbble.com/andyharry [The postings on this site are my own and do not necessarily represent the position, strategy or opinions of adidas and/or its brands.] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlueSky Posted July 23, 2006 Share Posted July 23, 2006 I'd either drop the words "high school" or move them up next to "Central." As it is, they're just kind of hanging out there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shumway Posted July 23, 2006 Share Posted July 23, 2006 The main thing that's jumping out at me is just to simplify the wings. They do look kind of like scales, as JFR mentioned. It's a great start, and by simplifying the wings and face and trying different wordmark arrangement, you should come up with a successful design. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
leggman01 Posted July 23, 2006 Share Posted July 23, 2006 while they're rendered very well, those wings just don't work for me - way too much detail - maybe you could lose all but the tips - the box around the wordmark is too angular for the rest of the logo - find a way to fix those and you're there!edit: just realized i pretty much said exactly what tempest did...sorry i don't have more original c&c Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
quantum Posted July 23, 2006 Share Posted July 23, 2006 Did you use autotrace to create the falcon? The reason I ask is that the stroke weight of the wings is noticably uneven. At some points, it almost disappears. Autotrace is good for some tasks, but far from perfect. Consider redrawing the bird. You'll have better results. "One of my concerns is shysters show up and take advantage of people's good will and generosity". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yac12 Posted July 23, 2006 Share Posted July 23, 2006 IMO To much detail if the coaching staff at Central would want to embroider it on coaching shirts. Maybe just use the head of the Falcon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
L-Train33 Posted July 25, 2006 Author Share Posted July 25, 2006 Thanks for the input everyone. So far the main complaint is the wings (to simplify them and make them not so scaley looking) and the word mark could use a little work as well. It turns out I have more time to work on this so I will make the updates and post the new logo as soon as I can. Thanks again everyone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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