Framingham Freezerburn

[BostonBlazer]

I've designed logos and jerseys off of the PC's Paint program for a fictional team I thought up. I call them the Framingham Freezerburn. Framingham is a town in Massachusetts. This town has the largest population in the state.

I thought up the name "Freezerburn" after drawing a picture of an arctic fox character I usually draw (look at my avatar). I did that off of the PC as well. I drew him dressed as a hockey player in the Freezerburn jersey (before I thought up the team name). The jersey, which was mostly blue, had a random, orange and aqua flame pattern at the bottom. This was where the name came from. I then designed the jerseys with only a few changes, adding the flame pattern on the sleeves and changing a few fonts. I also designed the logos to go along with the jerseys.

Here are the jerseys I designed:

And here's the fox with the early Freezerburn jersey:

I'd post the logos now. But the computer's being a :censored:ing pain in the ass. I might post them later. You can comment on these if you want.

[fonz]

Good God, fix that colour scheme! Crazy on the eyes!

[SilentNoise]

Good God, fix that colour scheme! Crazy on the eyes!

You took the words right out of my mouth.

Wow is that hard to look at.

Honestly, if you're talking about the cold, use "cold colors" - try some blues, greens, even purples for that matter, along with whites, blacks & greys. While you do have blue and greens, they're neon versions of those colors - try maybe more of a darker blue, maybe a steel green. IMO the orange really doesn't belong.

Anyway, that's my constructive criticism and my $0.02.

[BostonBlazer]

I actually meant to give the feeling of both the heat and cold together.

I'll experiment with navy as a darker blue. But I'm sticking with a light blue as well for now. I won't use green. That, I feel, would be the least likely to work in this concept (just my thoughts). As for the orange, I'll use a different orange if it wouldn't hurt, one closer toward red.

[BostonBlazer]

Just redesigned the logos:

[capn89]

The colorscheme in the redesigned logos is a LOT better. But if you're going to hint at Islanders, you might as well go all out and add the teal-ish color instead of the awkward light blue. Just a suggestion.

[BostonBlazer]

And here's the revised jerseys:

[Jimmy!]

Two quick things:

1. The text on the front is very difficult to read. I'd lose it.

2. The blue puck on the blue jersey doesn't stand out very well. Change it to a lighter color (or white) to make it stand out more.

[rcb05]

Make the lighter blue more of a powder blue instead of neon teal.

The fox is very well-drawn.

[BostonBlazer]

The logo on the jersey is large enough. I'm not sizing it up anymore. I've already posted the logos themselves in a readable size. It's the team name in the font, "Mistral."

I did use a slightly lighter blue for the logo this time. Remember, you've asked for it. So here it is.

[BostonBlazer]

THIRD JERSEY!!!

This is something experimental now. I'm just pretty f***ed up at the moment. Have fun!

[Shylockthejew]

The colours are bad; the font on the logo, and the numbers, and the nameplate are bad; the logo itself is bad; the jerseys are way too busy. You can't possibly be serious about this, although if you are, do not spend any more time on this concept. I'm sure you can come up with better.

[BostonBlazer]

If these were ever to be used, they would instantly become the ugliest jerseys ever worn. The colours are bad; the font on the logo, and the numbers, and the nameplate are bad; the logo itself is bad; the jerseys are way too busy. In fact, this concept makes me want to tear my eyes out. You can't possibly be serious about this, although if you are, do not spend any more time on this concept. I'm sure you can come up with better.

What the f*** were you expecting then? This is a concept, nothing for reality. There's probably a thousand other logos in this forum you'll despise. It's not like we're getting paid to design team logos and jerseys here. Fine. Hate everything about it. I don't f***ing care. It's my art and not yours...

[Eye]

This is good, I think that maybe if you swapped black for an ice blue, maybe that would work too, even though it's already used on the jersey elsewhere. Also, if you inorporated the fox onto the jerseys somehow, maybe as a shoulder path or alternate jersey, I would like it even more. Good work though.

[Lumbergh]

What the f*** were you expecting then? This is a concept, nothing for reality. There's probably a thousand other logos in this forum you'll despise. It's not like we're getting paid to design team logos and jerseys here. Fine. Hate everything about it. I don't f***ing care. It's my art and not yours...

Whoa! Calm down. When you come on here, expect crtiticism form people. The way you get passed it, is just roll with the punches, and keep your attitude down.

[FiddySicks]

That Fox is so damn awesome. Your third should be a classic lookin jersey with the fox on it.

[BostonBlazer]

What the f*** were you expecting then?  This is a concept, nothing for reality.  There's probably a thousand other logos in this forum you'll despise.  It's not like we're getting paid to design team logos and jerseys here.  Fine.  Hate everything about it.  I don't f***ing care.  It's my art and not yours...

Whoa! Calm down. When you come on here, expect crtiticism form people. The way you get passed it, is just roll with the punches, and keep your attitude down.

Sorry. I'm still f***ed up from last night. I was gettin carried away here.

So you guys want me to use the fox on the jersey. Okay then. I'll work with the secondary logo by adding him on and see what I come up with. It'll be used as the jerseys' shoulder patches and on the third.

[BostonBlazer]

It's been a while. But I've now got the arctic fox on the jersey as requested. But I came up with two types of secondary logos, one with the fox with the F-shaped flame, and the other with just his head. I was wondering which one you people like more.

I made a few changes with the fox and his clothes. I put flames on the hat, scarf, and tail. On the type A logo, I had to play with the colors till the fox stood out from the F-shaped flame. Don't mind the extra colors being used. The only colors meant to be the team colors are on the big flame. In type B, I reversed the head to give enough space for the C-patch.

[slapshot]

There's nothing about the wordmark that suggests "Freezerburn". It just looks like you typed it up in a weird font and placed it inside the logo.

When I think Freezerburn, I think frosty imagery. Maybe some snow, some ice crystals, some really italicized text that looks wind-blown. Not Mistral.

If you're going to use an unusual font for the uniforms, it looks weird if your wordmark/logo font is also unusual...it's not as weird if the wordmark is set in Helvetica or some other standard block font.

You've got the flame thing down, but I wouldn't use orange. Orange flames are warm. Blue flames would seem a lot colder than orange ones. Maybe you could have orange for a highlight somewhere, but not for the flames themselves.

You should minimize your colors too. Logos are more effective when you minimize the color scheme. I see black, pink, yellow, orange, and four shades of blue. Eight colors? That's ultra-cartoony. If you're going to use different shades of blue, at least make them different from each other...two of your shades are close enough that they look unintentionally different, which makes this look sloppy and not thought out.

Also, if this fox is from the cold, he should probably have icicles or snow on him somewhere. He looks more like the Sandman.

[BostonBlazer]

There's nothing about the wordmark that suggests "Freezerburn". It just looks like you typed it up in a weird font and placed it inside the logo.

When I think Freezerburn, I think frosty imagery. Maybe some snow, some ice crystals, some really italicized text that looks wind-blown. Not Mistral.

If you're going to use an unusual font for the uniforms, it looks weird if your wordmark/logo font is also unusual...it's not as weird if the wordmark is set in Helvetica or some other standard block font.

You've got the flame thing down, but I wouldn't use orange. Orange flames are warm. Blue flames would seem a lot colder than orange ones. Maybe you could have orange for a highlight somewhere, but not for the flames themselves.

You should minimize your colors too. Logos are more effective when you minimize the color scheme. I see black, pink, yellow, orange, and four shades of blue. Eight colors? That's ultra-cartoony. If you're going to use different shades of blue, at least make them different from each other...two of your shades are close enough that they look unintentionally different, which makes this look sloppy and not thought out.

Also, if this fox is from the cold, he should probably have icicles or snow on him somewhere. He looks more like the Sandman.

I said in my second post on this thread I'm using a mix of heat and the cold for this logo.

Adding the arctic fox in the logo was already requested by two posters here, so I put him in. The thing is (as I already mentioned), I was trying to get the fox to stand out from the "F" he's with. The colors not involved with the main color scheme of light blue, medium-dark blue, and orange, shouldn't affect the logo too much and should be simplified when necessary, I know. But how else could I get him be noticed in that logo?

What I can do is this. I'll come up with a third variation of the patch logo using only the fox head and will try to sum down the color scheme to just the three colors. I not re-doing Type A. I made these two other variations to see which one you'd like me to use more.