DigitalMikey Posted July 8, 2011 Share Posted July 8, 2011 First off, this is one of my first sports logos I have done. I've been staring at it for hours and can't figure out what it is that's giving it the "I'm not quite finished" look. I was wondering if you fine folks would give me a few tips/pointers. Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jahgee Posted July 8, 2011 Share Posted July 8, 2011 First off, this is one of my first sports logos I have done. I've been staring at it for hours and can't figure out what it is that's giving it the "I'm not quite finished" look. I was wondering if you fine folks would give me a few tips/pointers. Thanks!I can't read the bottom font, I would change that, other than that, though, good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
missouri tigers Posted July 8, 2011 Share Posted July 8, 2011 You should work on making the bottom word easier to read, I assume it says DEN, is that right?Other than that, you should see what it looks like without the green outlined triangles on both sides of the word LEAGUE. Or, maybe, you could just make them a solid color with no outline. Possibly green? Then also make the triangle below the the E in the lower word the same color. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GeauxColonels Posted July 8, 2011 Share Posted July 8, 2011 What these guys said. It's hard to make out the first letter in the bottom word. Rework that. Eliminate the 3 green triangles. I would also get rid of the sunburst between the two words as well as the darker shade of the blue behind the word green. That definitely seems unnecessary. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Signals Posted July 8, 2011 Share Posted July 8, 2011 I can't help but read "OEN" in the bottom there (maybe that's what I'm supposed to see). It seems kind of forced the way it's shaped and blends in a little too well with the surrounding elements.The green outlined triangles on the left and right don't seem to flow with the rest of the piece. None of the angles of the triangle correspond or run parallel to the surrounding shapes.Some touching up needs to be done, many of the strokes you have aren't consistent with each other (unless they're not supposed to be?). You'll notice the strokes in the area above "League" alternates between miter and round joins and the white area looks funny not properly aligning with the dark blue area.For a first logo, my nit-picking aside, it is wonderful and shows a lot of potential. I know that I was nowhere near that level when I was beginning. I look forward to seeing more of your work in the future Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DigitalMikey Posted July 8, 2011 Author Share Posted July 8, 2011 Thanks guys. I really appreciate the feedback.I'll rework the "D" some more and remove the green outlines.I'll post an updated version in a few. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DigitalMikey Posted July 8, 2011 Author Share Posted July 8, 2011 How about this? Any better? Is the "D" a bit more visible? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GeauxColonels Posted July 8, 2011 Share Posted July 8, 2011 How about this? Any better? Is the "D" a bit more visible?A little, but take a look at the corners of the different colored shields. There's no consistency between them. Some are rounded...others are sharp. Also, they aren't parallel. Not sure if that's intentional or not...but there doesn't seem to be a reason for them NOT to be parallel. Also, I would still eliminate the darker triangle sections on either side of "League" as well as the slightly darker right side of the white. Also eliminate the blue under the "E". Not sure if it will look better with a white spot there, but the "E" looks like is has a goatee. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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