DolphinManatee Posted January 4, 2012 Author Share Posted January 4, 2012 Any advice on how to draw a script on paper? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeFrank Posted January 4, 2012 Share Posted January 4, 2012 Yea I'd say the home script is the biggest issue by far. Doesn't look very good. I like the idea of a wavy script with some sharper lines. It just has to be more balanced. concepts: washington football (2017) ... nfl (2013) ... yikes potd 10/20/12 origin story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jaha32 Posted January 4, 2012 Share Posted January 4, 2012 As I see it, the problems with the script are these:too thinthe M is too slanted everything comes to a point which isnt always a bad thing, but here since the letters are so thin, it makes the letters look even thinner DesignsByHahn.com Behance Dribbble Instragram Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
29texan Posted January 4, 2012 Share Posted January 4, 2012 It's times like this I hate that club owners don't look on these boards..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DolphinManatee Posted January 4, 2012 Author Share Posted January 4, 2012 Here's a drawing of the Marlins script. I need suggestion on where to go from here.Here are comparison scripts: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeFrank Posted January 5, 2012 Share Posted January 5, 2012 That actually looks really really good. Nice work!! concepts: washington football (2017) ... nfl (2013) ... yikes potd 10/20/12 origin story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
54Chevy Posted January 5, 2012 Share Posted January 5, 2012 Here's a drawing of the Marlins script. I need suggestion on where to go from here.the weight of the strokes are still very inconsistant. look how the "s" looks pinched compared to the thickness of the "a" and "r". actually, the m-a-r-l is pretty consistant, but the i-n-s is too thin. i understand what you are trying to do with the letters coming to points to mimick the tail, but it's not helping your cause. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DolphinManatee Posted January 5, 2012 Author Share Posted January 5, 2012 OK, how about this (sorry for the crappy picture): Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BigBubba Posted January 5, 2012 Share Posted January 5, 2012 Much better. The problem with your first script was that you kinda ran out of space with the last few letters (if that makes any sense whatsoever), so they were squished and this very thin. This is concept-ready!Remember, it's not like he can't edit it once he's traced it into a graphic. IMO just try it out as a graphic and see what it looks like (tweak it, of course). Nobody cares about your humungous-big signature. PotD: 29/1/12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McCall Posted January 5, 2012 Share Posted January 5, 2012 Not really. The 's' still doesn't really resemble an 's', and the 'M' still appears sloppy. And the pointedness of the 'l' and 'i' don't really work within a script wordmark. Really comes off as "handrawn" and not in a style, but rather "unfinished" sort of way. https://dribbble.com/MakaioCall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DolphinManatee Posted January 6, 2012 Author Share Posted January 6, 2012 Here is how it looks like as a graphic: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fox Posted January 6, 2012 Share Posted January 6, 2012 better, but it still has some issues. The biggest, to me, is that the S does not look like an S. Also, I've come around to think that this script would look better with a black outline, not orange. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DolphinManatee Posted January 6, 2012 Author Share Posted January 6, 2012 better, but it still has some issues. The biggest, to me, is that the S does not look like an S. Also, I've come around to think that this script would look better with a black outline, not orange.With the "s", I'm trying to make it look more like an "s" while keeping the same flow. I do not like the traditional "s" you would find in most scripts, mainly because their is too many loops in the traditional "s".I should make the orange contrast more from the teal. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DolphinManatee Posted January 6, 2012 Author Share Posted January 6, 2012 Here is my fix on the "s":EDIT: Don't think I don't know people are looking in this thread. Please comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McCall Posted January 6, 2012 Share Posted January 6, 2012 Here is my fix on the "s":EDIT: Don't think I don't know people are looking in this thread. Please comment.Don't be a doosh.As for the script, the 's' does look a little better, but the 'M' is still awkward and the mark as a whole, especially the 'l' and 'i', just doesn't look right. https://dribbble.com/MakaioCall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
drdougfresh Posted January 6, 2012 Share Posted January 6, 2012 Here is my fix on the "s":EDIT: Don't think I don't know people are looking in this thread. Please comment.I've noticed you're quite passive aggressive. Hint: don't be. Posting crap like that is a good way to alienate yourself. And really, if you want C&C, complaining about thread view:comment ratio is pretty lame. Are you looking solely for comments, or are you looking to improve your project? Quality over quantity, my friend. And there's plenty of quality C&C here that you haven't taken kindly to.On to the actual concept, it's still not uniform enough. The M, L, and I all look off. I would suggest redrawing with consistency in mind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BigBubba Posted January 6, 2012 Share Posted January 6, 2012 On second glance, the top right portion of the "M" is off. It goes too high and far off, really throwing the entire letter off. I don't really see a problem with the "i", but the "l" could flow a bit better. The right side is a smooth curve, but the left side curves, then changes direction, and slants more rightward. Nobody cares about your humungous-big signature. PotD: 29/1/12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DolphinManatee Posted January 7, 2012 Author Share Posted January 7, 2012 I'm sorry for being an , I'm just frustrated with everything. (BTW, I have felt alienated on the board every since I've joined. It seems like every time I comment on a thread, the thread just dies.) As for the script, I'll fix the "l" to be consistent with the "i", fix the "M" and rotate the script clockwise about 5 degrees (to me it looks awkward the way it is slanted now). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DolphinManatee Posted January 7, 2012 Author Share Posted January 7, 2012 Update:Also, should the home cap be teal with an orange brim, or black with a teal brim? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rayman Posted January 7, 2012 Share Posted January 7, 2012 the part of the M in the red should have a curve/slant to what the arrow is showing (or vise versa) IMO ...where the purple circle is, the line is too close to the "M" if you wanted it to be that close you might as well find a way to attach it (which i wouldnt do) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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