Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 I know this was posted under 'concepts' but this is not a concept of any team... I just made this on my own. It's a logo of my favorite bird, (the world's fastest flying bird) the peregrine falcon...and my logo... comments? complaints?i tried to avoid using gold and vegas gold, so i just stuck with vegas. And of course I made a few tweaks to make him look better. Mostly on his beak... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
connriv Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 The head and the beak are two separate shapes in your logo. Try to make the beak blend seamlessly with the head. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TorinK92 Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 It also looks like the forehead is slanted way to vertically. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Author Share Posted November 21, 2013 It also looks like the forehead is slanted way to vertically.Working on it now....The head and the beak are two separate shapes in your logo. Try to make the beak blend seamlessly with the head.do you mean like a gradient? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Author Share Posted November 21, 2013 Not sure about what connriv meant, so I pulled the beak more onto the bird's head (I hope that's what he meant), and the new forhead angle makes it look so much better. It looks more intimidating... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TorinK92 Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 What he meant was that the bird IRL has an almost seamless transition from the slope of the forehead with the beak, with a slight divot.You pretty much have a right angle between the head and the beak.You either need to slant the forehead more, or tilt the beak down, or both, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Author Share Posted November 21, 2013 What he meant was that the bird IRL has an almost seamless transition from the slope of the forehead with the beak, with a slight divot.You pretty much have a right angle between the head and the beak.You either need to slant the forehead more, or tilt the beak down, or both,Oh I see... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Author Share Posted November 21, 2013 You mean raise the beak up more on the head? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hugevolsfan Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 No he is saying that the hump from the beak going to the forehead should not be as much as it is judging by your reference pick.Also the dark part of the eye should be to the front with the vegas gold in the back because right now the bird is looking behind him & not forward. My Fictional Football League Version 3 My Fictional Football Leagues WebsiteMy Church Website Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Author Share Posted November 21, 2013 Oh, duh. Sorry guys I've been mentally slow recently. Less of a beak-to-forehead angle, and reverse the vegas in his eye... gotchaWhen we feel comfortable with the logo we can work on the name if "Peregrines" isn't working. I feel there is a better name out there. And also maybe some color modifications... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MrWonka Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 Im not too fond of the color choice. I think the progress on the logo itself is great. I just think that maybe the beige should be brightened. It seems like the two colors are trying to be shadowed by the other. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Author Share Posted November 21, 2013 As requested... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dan O'Mac Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 I think you've got the head down. I just don't think the colors scream "Boston" to me, and a hawk isn't something I'd associate with the area, so I'm not sure if ANY colors would be "Boston" to me I like this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 21, 2013 Author Share Posted November 21, 2013 I think you've got the head down. I just don't think the colors scream "Boston" to me, and a hawk isn't something I'd associate with the area, so I'm not sure if ANY colors would be "Boston" to meI did say the name could use work... I'm up for a new location as well... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TorinK92 Posted November 21, 2013 Share Posted November 21, 2013 Maybe Atlanta? Maybe even somewhere in France or Germany?But the head shape is a definite improvement, I quite like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whittier S Posted November 22, 2013 Share Posted November 22, 2013 Peregrine is going to work in most cities because peregrine falcons are well adapted to large cities. However, the word "peregrine" literally means "pilgrim", which makes it the perfect name for a Boston team. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 23, 2013 Author Share Posted November 23, 2013 Maybe Atlanta? Maybe even somewhere in France or Germany?But the head shape is a definite improvement, I quite like it.That's right I never said keep the location within the United States...Peregrine is going to work in most cities because peregrine falcons are well adapted to large cities. However, the word "peregrine" literally means "pilgrim", which makes it the perfect name for a Boston team.Huh, did not know that. But that makes this location and team name make much more sense.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
suplauren Posted November 26, 2013 Share Posted November 26, 2013 Your progress has been great. The beak needs work. Make the end more hooked. Right now it doesn't look like the beak of a bird of prey. Also, that little "tooth" in the middle of the beak you can see in the ref pic, is actually very diagnostic of Peregines, as they use it to kill their prey (they're my fave animal, too ), so you may want to consider having it in the logo. The gold outline at the end of the beak also makes no sense, it goes MUCH further than the actual logo does. The lines on the bottom half of the head are also too jagged and haphazard, make them smoother to fit in with the rest of your logo. I'm not big on the colors (brown and gold could be wonderful), but they're alright. Not bad so far, just needs some touching up! laurenlogos.tumblr.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whittier S Posted November 27, 2013 Share Posted November 27, 2013 The jagged indigo area (my fave colour so yay) below the eye is totally haphazard, and doesn't bear any resemblance to the markings of a peregrine falcon. I'd simplify that considerably. In the reference photo, it looks like that area sweeps back. I'd suggest the front of that area be a smooth curve, and the back of it serrated, which would lend a fast, aerodynamic feel to the logo.I'd also tweak the other colour (pale pewter?) towards the yellow part of the spectrum, to play off the natural complementary relationship between purples and yellows. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elijah Summerdrum Posted November 30, 2013 Author Share Posted November 30, 2013 Your progress has been great. The beak needs work. Make the end more hooked. Right now it doesn't look like the beak of a bird of prey. Also, that little "tooth" in the middle of the beak you can see in the ref pic, is actually very diagnostic of Peregines, as they use it to kill their prey (they're my fave animal, too ), so you may want to consider having it in the logo. The gold outline at the end of the beak also makes no sense, it goes MUCH further than the actual logo does. The lines on the bottom half of the head are also too jagged and haphazard, make them smoother to fit in with the rest of your logo. I'm not big on the colors (brown and gold could be wonderful), but they're alright. Not bad so far, just needs some touching up!As requested, duller beak, with the "tooth". I also thinned the outline from the beak-point outline debacle. I also tried a new nostril that looks more like the one on my reference. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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