nyjet88 Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 http://www.riemendesign.comC&C Appreciated. I know I need to work on the text...I am not that good at writing descriptions. Anything I can do to improve it, please let me know.Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gordie_delini Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 Is there a reason when going to one of your portfolio samples it says "site by Walk Design" and not you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nyjet88 Posted January 23, 2009 Author Share Posted January 23, 2009 Is there a reason when going to one of your portfolio samples it says "site by Walk Design" and not you?Notice I have "developed". I did not design that site, obviously. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
logoman Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 Although you're a Jets fan, I still have to say that parts of the site are very nice. I like the post-it notes. (I always thought I might use that but you beat me to it). I think you should work on the descriptions a little and maybe make the writing on the post-its active links. This first thing I did was click on the post it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nyjet88 Posted January 23, 2009 Author Share Posted January 23, 2009 Although you're a Jets fan, I still have to say that parts of the site are very nice. I like the post-it notes. (I always thought I might use that but you beat me to it). I think you should work on the descriptions a little and maybe make the writing on the post-its active links. This first thing I did was click on the post it.Ha. I am ashamed to be a Jets fan at this point. Ugh.Thanks for the tip on the post-it and making it an active link...maybe have the services offered go to services page, and the other one link up to an email?Definitely need to work on my descriptions.Thanks again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gordie_delini Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 right on - i would just make that clear that you developed the site, not designed it. Because when you go the site, it says "by Walk Design", so you may want to speak to Matt about that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fiasco! Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 Home Page? "purchashed" should be "purchased"? capitalize WordPressAbout Page- "exceled" should be "excelled"In the Portfolio section- You misspelled "Environmental"- "Wallachs" should be "Wallach's" - "Photoshop", "Illustrator", "Flash", "Dreamweaver", and "WordPress" should be capitalized- "maintaining" is misspelledServices- WordPress again- "yahoo" should be "Yahoo!"- "google" should be "Google"- "ask" should be "Ask"Clients- "Environmental" misspelled againLooks good, though. LinkedIn Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cola Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 You misspelled "Environmental".As well as "purchased." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fiasco! Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 You misspelled "Environmental".As well as "purchased."Yep, as soon as I saw that one, I thought I'd proof the whole site. Someone needed to do it. LinkedIn Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cola Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 You misspelled "Environmental".As well as "purchased."Yep, as soon as I saw that one, I thought I'd proof the whole site. Someone needed to do it.Yeah, sometimes I am a stickler for spelling and grammar. In cases like this, I think it is very important when you have potential clients looking at the site. Mistakes like that may lead the customer to believe the same attention to detail may occur in his/her work requests.This sentence bugs me as well:"JetNation was a wordpress theme that they purchashed, we took, and then customized the graphics and some layout."The wording seems unclear and off; I was thinking:"JetNation was developed from a purchased WordPress theme that we acquired and customized through graphic and layout editing." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nyjet88 Posted January 23, 2009 Author Share Posted January 23, 2009 You misspelled "Environmental".As well as "purchased."Yep, as soon as I saw that one, I thought I'd proof the whole site. Someone needed to do it.Yeah, sometimes I am a stickler for spelling and grammar. In cases like this, I think it is very important when you have potential clients looking at the site. Mistakes like that may lead the customer to believe the same attention to detail may occur in his/her work requests.This sentence bugs me as well:"JetNation was a wordpress theme that they purchashed, we took, and then customized the graphics and some layout."The wording seems unclear and off; I was thinking:"JetNation was developed from a purchased WordPress theme that we acquired and customized through graphic and layout editing."Thanks for the grammar tips everyone. Will make these changes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Davidson Posted January 24, 2009 Share Posted January 24, 2009 in your about section, you change tense from first to third person. its wierd. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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