beansdooma Posted August 19, 2006 Share Posted August 19, 2006 Any C&C at all would be appreciated. I put a lot of work into these. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stampman Posted August 19, 2006 Share Posted August 19, 2006 I like the general idea-- The colours & images fit the idea--and the striping backs that up---there seems to a be a reason for it.Some suggetsions-Didyou try the logo on the front of the helmet--that would say commander more to me.Did you try blue or red helmets? WHite may work best--but did you try that?I'd use all CAPS on the player names--and make the font a bit larger.I'd move the numbers up a bit on the jerseysAdd numbers on the shouldersThe away jerseys should have red or blue numbersThe wordmark logo combination is a bit hard to decipher in that size--maybe simplify it a bit.But overall nice work--just a few tweaks and it should be even better. Comic Sans walks into a bar, and the bartender says, "Sorry, we don't serve your type here." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fonz Posted August 19, 2006 Share Posted August 19, 2006 -Add a logo or wordmark to the jerseys somewhere-Use a different font-Don't put white numbers on a white jersey-Add numbers to the shoulders/sleeves-The logo looks crowded with the wordmark overlaying it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beansdooma Posted August 19, 2006 Author Share Posted August 19, 2006 Updated!I may re-do all the font and numbers on it. That would take a lot of work though, so it would take a while. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shumway Posted August 19, 2006 Share Posted August 19, 2006 Question- are you suggesting 6 different pant types? I'm assuming(and hoping) not, but since you have 6 different styles...- The chest logo's bothering me for some reason...maybe put it at the collar.- The helmet logo's kind of massive, I'd make it smaller.- THe alts are entirely too busy with the shoulder striping. I'd try to simplify them.Otherwise, you've got pretty good stuff here. Some minor changes should do the trick. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beansdooma Posted August 20, 2006 Author Share Posted August 20, 2006 Update! Added a secondary logo, and replaced the numbers and lettering with block letters. The next thing I need to work on is a new wordmark.I also forgot to use the smaller logo on the helmet, I'll add that next update. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nwtrailtrekker Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 you hardly ever see 2 alt jerseys but i like it. might as well elimiatre the road jersey though, make alt 2 the road, and put blue stripes on the red one. to keep the theme going. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stampman Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 Definite improvements!Have you tried a red outline on the away jersey's numbers?I'd move the shoulder numbers up a bit higher.But I like this one the best.BTW--it looks like you did this in Paint (not a complaint--I use paint)--nice to see you aren't using that as an excuse! Comic Sans walks into a bar, and the bartender says, "Sorry, we don't serve your type here." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fonz Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 You are improving. But ditch that DC logo! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shumway Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 I've gotta agree...the DC logo's not doing much for me either. I still think you have too may pants, but it's better than what you had. I would suggest keeping one white pant style, and changing the other jersey accordingly. For example, changing the side stripe to blue on the road set and using the white pants with the blue stripe as pants. Either that, or have the blue pants the only ones for the road set. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HarperK Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 dont mean to sound picky, but just so you know, sleeve numbers say 92 ʎɐqǝ uo pɹɐoqʎǝʞ ɐ ʎnq ı ǝɯıʇ ʇsɐן ǝɥʇ sı sıɥʇ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beansdooma Posted August 20, 2006 Author Share Posted August 20, 2006 I tried some new pant striping, what do you think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beansdooma Posted August 20, 2006 Author Share Posted August 20, 2006 EDIT: Well, these are pretty much finished. I thank you guys for your help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EJ_Barlik Posted August 21, 2006 Share Posted August 21, 2006 I liked where you were going early on. The later refinements are gopod for honing your skills.I actually liked the grey highlights, but going without them is OK too.Keep on trying...you are starting to think like a good designer. 5-time Defending NL East Champions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrianVlietDesign Posted August 21, 2006 Share Posted August 21, 2006 looks good NYCFC - MLS CUP CHAMPIONS - 2021 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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