cjzilligen Posted March 23, 2010 Share Posted March 23, 2010 This looks much better, I think you've nailed it. Dribbble | Twitter | Facebook | Portfolio Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Davidson Posted March 24, 2010 Share Posted March 24, 2010 nice work, but you really should get rid of that last outline. if you want a final white outline, draw one.the ai outline is poor and the rounded edges always seem to take a way the nice dynamic edges. look at the teeth for instance.i still reckon you could simplify it further. im sure youre pretty happy with it as it is, but perhaps just for kicks and for practiceyou might like to try a few versions?lastly the wordmark has been neutered by the outlines also. i reckon you could just use orange for tigers and white for huron,no outlines at all, but if you are going to use one, make sure you keep your edges sharp and you fill in any of those awkwardnegative spaces (see between r and s on tigers). also the text should be half that size and be separated more from the logo.its all crammed together so far.nice helmet placement. oh and nice helmet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sport Posted March 24, 2010 Share Posted March 24, 2010 That tongue still isn't exactly right for me. It looks like he's sticking it out too much almost like he's at the doctor or something. I'd move it back farther into the mouth so it's not touching the the bottom teeth. Also, somewhere in all these updates he lost the intensity in his face. If you turned those two "eyebrow" lines inward then it would make him appear angrier. Great job though. It rivals a lot of tiger logos out there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DanDismounts Posted March 24, 2010 Author Share Posted March 24, 2010 nice work, but you really should get rid of that last outline. if you want a final white outline, draw one.the ai outline is poor and the rounded edges always seem to take a way the nice dynamic edges. look at the teeth for instance.i still reckon you could simplify it further. im sure youre pretty happy with it as it is, but perhaps just for kicks and for practiceyou might like to try a few versions?lastly the wordmark has been neutered by the outlines also. i reckon you could just use orange for tigers and white for huron,no outlines at all, but if you are going to use one, make sure you keep your edges sharp and you fill in any of those awkwardnegative spaces (see between r and s on tigers). also the text should be half that size and be separated more from the logo.its all crammed together so far.nice helmet placement. oh and nice helmet.I changed the outline to keep a nice crisp feel to it like you said, Thanks for the advise!...I'll work on the wordmark a little later I got a pretty full day of classes ahead of me so it wont be til later. By the way of course the helmet looks sweet, best helmet template out there! Thanks for that also! DAN|dismounts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frenchie Posted March 24, 2010 Share Posted March 24, 2010 I find that while very slightly different, there is something that looks quite different about the mouth: It no longer feels like a Roar, but more of a "Open up and say Aaah!" at the doctor's.Can't tell you how to fix it (what a surpries... ) but it doesn't seem as angry as the previous version...Then again, maybe I've been staring at it for too long... should get back to work...Keep up the great work!!! @Frenchie_TO Owner of the Rochester Americans of the MLH Owner of the Toronto Frenchies of the GCFHL6 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GFB Posted March 24, 2010 Share Posted March 24, 2010 I find that while very slightly different, there is something that looks quite different about the mouth: It no longer feels like a Roar, but more of a "Open up and say Aaah!" at the doctor's.Can't tell you how to fix it (what a surpries... ) but it doesn't seem as angry as the previous version...Then again, maybe I've been staring at it for too long... should get back to work...Keep up the great work!!!I think it has to do with the fact that the tiger has no definition around the nose... While the perspective is off on this tiger, you can see how a cats nose forms a shape that looks something like this:( v ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DanDismounts Posted March 25, 2010 Author Share Posted March 25, 2010 Here I have changed the eyes which make it look more angry but more cartoony at the same time... :S I also posted the original version and the previous version for comparison. DAN|dismounts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sergeimakarenkov44 Posted March 25, 2010 Share Posted March 25, 2010 I like the new eyes, though they don't really seem as angry as they maybe could. I agree with whoever said the tongue is still off. I would be interested in seeing what it looks like without the tongue just for kicks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cjzilligen Posted March 25, 2010 Share Posted March 25, 2010 I think your problem is that your tiger has no cheeks, which make up the tiger's snarl. Dribbble | Twitter | Facebook | Portfolio Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DanDismounts Posted March 25, 2010 Author Share Posted March 25, 2010 No tongue for sergrimakarenov44...and I changed the cheeks up a bit... DAN|dismounts Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vicfurth Posted March 25, 2010 Share Posted March 25, 2010 It definitely needs the tongue. Maybe make it follow the near line of the lower jaw a little bit more? Doing that may help the two lines that are kinda working against each other. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sport Billy Posted March 26, 2010 Share Posted March 26, 2010 The tongue still bothers me. When a Tiger roars, his tongue cups, it does not bow.The nose also has to be more pronounced. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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