TrezoBarz Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 This is my first post in this forum. I've always been messing around and creating random logos but never felt like uploading them... So I figured I'd start with this one. I got the idea from the old St. Louis Hawks logo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PSUcelticsWON95 Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 This is a really great start. I'd work on the bottom part of the beak, as it seems to be nonexistent at the moment (normally it'd be okay, since the beak would appear to be one object, but since you have the grin in there, it seems like the bottom part needs to be separated). But aside from that, I really, really like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AHcreative Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 Looks like a pretty decent start to me. I'll echo what PSU said above, the beak needs to be fixed just a tad. The "stripe" on the top of the beak right now sorta reminds me of Tucan Sam, ya know, from the Froot Loops box. But all-in-all, it looks good so far. I look forward to seeing some color in this. Have you thought of any color options? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrezoBarz Posted June 12, 2014 Author Share Posted June 12, 2014 I saw what you mean by the beak being seperate, I think now that I fixed it, it looks much better. And as for color, I like the way the Atlanta Hawks colors look on this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jake3roo Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 Wow, these are really good! Put maybe an ATL on it, and that's a new Atlanta hawks logo! Â Â Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrezoBarz Posted June 12, 2014 Author Share Posted June 12, 2014 Here's the logo with the ATL on it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrezoBarz Posted June 12, 2014 Author Share Posted June 12, 2014 White ATL rather than red and white... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mamiller99 Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 This could also be a UMASS Lowell or Springfield Falcons logo. That's what- She Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mamiller99 Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 I think the logo could also use the sports logo shading, granted I don't know how to do it. That's what- She Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vnardella5 Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 i dont like that its smiling....make it look like fierce..whose afraid of a smiling bird?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrezoBarz Posted June 12, 2014 Author Share Posted June 12, 2014 Fierce bird Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vnardella5 Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 better, maybe adjust the eye/eyebrow too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LA_Angels Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 Welcome to the Fourms! This is a very good start, I hope to see a series from you in the future Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrezoBarz Posted June 12, 2014 Author Share Posted June 12, 2014 How's this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadojoker Posted June 12, 2014 Share Posted June 12, 2014 How's this?Much better. .yellow/gold and red maybe?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrezoBarz Posted June 12, 2014 Author Share Posted June 12, 2014 Much better. .yellow/gold and red maybe??Do you mean in place of the navy? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
missouri tigers Posted June 13, 2014 Share Posted June 13, 2014 IMO, you've only regressed from your original mark. There was really no reason to define the beak differently than you originally had. Obviously real hawks have beaks that connect from top to bottom at the corner of the mouth but rendering it differently as you did in the OP doesn't take away from the mark. There are plenty of examples of logos of birds that have the lower beak rendered similarly to what you had originally and none of them look inherently off.Also, his expression went from a cocky\aggressive smile to who farted? If I were you, I'd revisit the original mark and go from there. This concept has a lot of promise, I'd just hate to see it driven to something mediocre because of C&C and suggestions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(probably)notabandwagonfan Posted June 13, 2014 Share Posted June 13, 2014 IMO, you've only regressed from your original mark. There was really no reason to define the beak differently than you originally had. Obviously real hawks have beaks that connect from top to bottom at the corner of the mouth but rendering it differently as you did in the OP doesn't take away from the mark. There are plenty of examples of logos of birds that have the lower beak rendered similarly to what you had originally and none of them look inherently off.Also, his expression went from a cocky\aggressive smile to who farted? If I were you, I'd revisit the original mark and go from there. This concept has a lot of promise, I'd just hate to see it driven to something mediocre because of C&C and suggestions.I was about to say the same thing. The "fierce" update looks like he aged fifty human years. The first update though looks great, the smile conveyed kind of an arrogant smile, as if to say, "we're better than you and we know that". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadojoker Posted June 13, 2014 Share Posted June 13, 2014 Yellow/gold instead of navy..yes but still looks great with navy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TrezoBarz Posted June 13, 2014 Author Share Posted June 13, 2014 After experimenting with the smiley and angry hawk personally I think the smiley one looks better due to the arrogant/cocky look it has. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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