vazquez Posted June 4, 2011 Share Posted June 4, 2011 Howdy, I have not posted in awhile being busy with school and all, but I have begun work on a concept for my school university Indiana Purdue Fort Wayne(IPFW) just for something to take up some time, I Obviously know this needs work, But I would appreciate some C&C on it, so I can make it a solid piece, worthy of being shown to the world. Thanks!Some side notes I've learned while attending, the triangle is very important to use because it represents 2 schools forming one, while it also is the main shape used in the university logo. The mastodon is the discovery of bones found in the first years. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
undead Posted June 4, 2011 Share Posted June 4, 2011 Very nice start. I would thicken the strokes to a weight similar to the shadows in the ears. Add some shadows by the eyes to make him look more menacing. The tusks look a little off. They don't look like they facing forward. They look like they're facing sideways. I don't know how to fix that. You'll just have to try some different looks.Looking forward to an update as this has the potential to be an iconic mark. Portfoliobobschultz6' class="bbc_url">@bobschultz6 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sc49erfan15 Posted June 4, 2011 Share Posted June 4, 2011 Good start, you obviously have some good illustration skills.First off, I'd take away the "presentation" (shadows, scratches, filters, etc) and just show the logo for now. It's hard to critique something you can't see all of.I like the idea of the triangle, but not sold on its execution. It, along with the diagonal IPFW, throws the balance of the logo off. You have a rather symmetric mastodon with a completely asymmetrical triangle. I'd make the triangle an equilateral with the point at either the top or the bottom, and do something else with the text.Looking forward to an update! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lights Out Posted June 5, 2011 Share Posted June 5, 2011 All the linework needs to be a lot thicker, IMO. I also think the eyes should be a lot simpler and more menacing. Overall, though, this has all the makings of a strong logo. Well done. POTD: 2/4/12 3/4/12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted June 6, 2011 Author Share Posted June 6, 2011 thanks so much for the little help, and the second version will be up by the end of the night. The Eyes are a PAIN. always have been my weakest suit. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted June 6, 2011 Author Share Posted June 6, 2011 Hey,I'm actually having some major trouble on the 2nd with shadows, I still obviously am learning, but the eyes and shadows are killing me. Any assistance would be great, even in paint going over what I just pasted. Thanks, and also looking to get some comments about the mastodon before I continue with the Triangle and word IPFW. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mbannon92 Posted June 6, 2011 Share Posted June 6, 2011 The update looks really good. Good job on thickening the strokes. For the eyes, I would just add a black stroke around them and put a pupil in. They don't need to be too complicated.On a side note, I have a bunch of friends that were at IPFW last year, and it's cool to see a concept for them on here! Nike + CFL 2015 | 2015-16 NBA Concepts | Complete College Football Redesign Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted June 6, 2011 Author Share Posted June 6, 2011 The update looks really good. Good job on thickening the strokes. For the eyes, I would just add a black stroke around them and put a pupil in. They don't need to be too complicated.On a side note, I have a bunch of friends that were at IPFW last year, and it's cool to see a concept for them on here!Thanks for that on the eyes, Ill see how that works, and to that sidenote yeah IPFW was not my first choice, but they were the financial choice. And I am really growing onto the school. I am falling in "love" with it. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted June 20, 2011 Author Share Posted June 20, 2011 Still stuck, I cant find the appropriate shadows. I have spent hours trying, and am completely stuck, I've updated the trunk, making it more symmetrical. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scottysprings Posted June 20, 2011 Share Posted June 20, 2011 Still stuck, I cant find the appropriate shadows. I have spent hours trying, and am completely stuck, I've updated the trunk, making it more symmetrical. You have a good foundation here to build on. I'd say make the white you have for the eyes the black you're using for the shading and then draw a smaller white eye within that. Also I think you can make the skin leading into the tusks the same gray as the rest of the skin. You've probably seen them but here are a few examples of elephant facial shading. Also look at the current IPFW logo and its shading for some ideas. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted June 20, 2011 Author Share Posted June 20, 2011 Quick update on shading, coming along, but still something I feel is a LONG ways away. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted August 9, 2011 Author Share Posted August 9, 2011 just a rough sketch, but the shadows are still a pain in the donkey. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BengalErnst Posted August 9, 2011 Share Posted August 9, 2011 theres something wrong with the tusks in my opinion. they look to be going backwards instead of forwards. maybe its just me tho THE Xtreme Fantasy Football League Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CJworks Posted August 9, 2011 Share Posted August 9, 2011 It's not just you; it's the shading. You've got to get rid of the shadowing near the top because it creates the illusion that it's behind the entire figure. Also, try thickening those outlines, and instead of using the gray shading, add more black to get rid of that "flat" look.Hope this helps, nice sketch by the way. Dribbble | Twitter | Facebook | Portfolio Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted August 9, 2011 Author Share Posted August 9, 2011 It's not just you; it's the shading. You've got to get rid of the shadowing near the top because it creates the illusion that it's behind the entire figure. Also, try thickening those outlines, and instead of using the gray shading, add more black to get rid of that "flat" look.Hope this helps, nice sketch by the way.Yeah, the shading on this is difficult, a little torn on the black because of the ears. The inside detail in the ears is something I feel I can not lose, I'll be back with updates in the coming days. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted August 9, 2011 Author Share Posted August 9, 2011 theres something wrong with the tusks in my opinion. they look to be going backwards instead of forwards. maybe its just me thoThe tusks actually are based off the orignial IPFW logo. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted August 12, 2011 Author Share Posted August 12, 2011 updated the sketch to computer. any improvements you can see will be appreciated. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
north dakota Posted August 12, 2011 Share Posted August 12, 2011 I think the logo needs to look a little more fierce looking. Woah! You think I'm Cody? My name is Carl Scott Simone and we just happen to share a birthday. BIG DEAL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted August 12, 2011 Author Share Posted August 12, 2011 I think the logo needs to look a little more fierce looking.Thanks, I will consider that, develop wise, Shadows and so forth is more so what I need criticism on. I appreciate the comment though. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted August 13, 2011 Author Share Posted August 13, 2011 I know it isnt the hot trend of topics since this is a smaller school, and so forth, so just giving it a friendly bump. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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