camcool21 Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 My first concept ever, took me about 45 min...Atlanta Falcons:Please, as my first concept, I need some criticism!!! Tell me how to make it better UPDATE 1:UPDATE 2:UPDATE 3:UPDATE 4: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
patsox Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 Is that supposed to be a Falcon? Am I an idiot for not being able to recognize it as one if it is? WTF? It simply doesn't look remotely like a living thing of any type. Keep working on this. It needs more work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NDwas Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 Is that supposed to be a Falcon? Am I an idiot for not being able to recognize it as one if it is? WTF? It simply doesn't look remotely like a living thing of any type. Keep working on this. It needs more work.Goddammit you're an ass. Tomorrow's just your future yesterday. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
camcool21 Posted July 1, 2007 Author Share Posted July 1, 2007 If anybody would like to share some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism that'd be great Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saturn Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 Is that supposed to be a Falcon? Am I an idiot for not being able to recognize it as one if it is? WTF? It simply doesn't look remotely like a living thing of any type. Keep working on this. It needs more work.Goddammit you're an ass.LOL. He is right for the most part though. The OP's logo simply doesn't fit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Imperfect Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 I wouldn't make the border red color so large and long. I like the colors and design though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
camcool21 Posted July 1, 2007 Author Share Posted July 1, 2007 Thank you Imperfect...only decent person on this board apparently... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hoopskid Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 For a first it's pretty good.A few things:- Like someone above said, not so much red border.- I can kinda see the falcon, just make the eye more visible. It's really hard to spot.- It might help if it was looking the other way. Sports teams usually tend to have the animal looking forward (to the right).Kinda symbolizes moving forward.Good job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vicfurth Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 Thank you Imperfect...only decent person on this board apparently...Don't be so quick to judge all based on the indecency of one. Somehow, I do see a potential idea here, but you'll need a lot more than 45 minutes to make it look good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
patsox Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 I wasn't really trying to be mean. I was just trying to get the point across that I could not tell that that was a Falcon. It's a little to abstract for my tastes. What you really need to do is make the black area more detailed in order for it to look a little bit more like a bird. Also reduce the red outline. Sorry 'bout that dude. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AHcreative Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 I kinda like it. The red outline is too thick though, it looks like a full bird inside the head of a bird. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nwtrailtrekker Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 you need to form it differently so you can make it look like an actual bird while incorperating the general shape of an A and/or an F. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DisturbedShifty Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 I would agree either bring the top of the red outline down a bit or make the balck part inside match the curve of the red instead of the 90 degree angle. And maybe make the wings look more like featehrs, I think they look to much like bat wings Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scar988 Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 dude as a Falcon fan I would hate that. not to sound rude btu it looks nothing like a Falcon... Try adapting the current head a little bit... one thing you could do is add a bit more read to it as well... I will say though that I like the idea of the wings flapping up. it reminds me of a concept a guy on the AF.com message boards did: RIP #55 JUNIOR SEAUOwner of ScarDraft.comBleacher Report NFL Featured Columnist Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
camcool21 Posted July 1, 2007 Author Share Posted July 1, 2007 OK...Thank you all for the C&C...now for an update.Falcon to the left:or...Falcon to the right:I will be back with an update in a bit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scar988 Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 the new one looks a bit better. try and define the eye a bit more though and maybe a red tip for the beak ... oh and the foot underneath it could be added (you know how birds have the tucked in legs... RIP #55 JUNIOR SEAUOwner of ScarDraft.comBleacher Report NFL Featured Columnist Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
camcool21 Posted July 1, 2007 Author Share Posted July 1, 2007 thanks for the help everyone...it's definately getting better everytime!!!anyway, newest update based on ur adviceV3:Bedtime now, mored updates tomorrow... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
camcool21 Posted July 1, 2007 Author Share Posted July 1, 2007 k, it's close enough to the morning...C&C por favor Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ColeJ Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 it's really starting to lose that whole "letter F" shape that they've had since they started...and this just looks a little too amorphous and detailed for my tastes. but it's still interesting to look at the more i look at it, though... the less it looks anything like an F, and the more it's starting to look like a broken swastika. lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Old School Fool Posted July 1, 2007 Share Posted July 1, 2007 lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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