vazquez Posted March 7, 2011 Author Share Posted March 7, 2011 Very good update. I still would change a couple of small things however. The beak should just be a little less "mechanized". A little shorter, pointed less upward and it looks great. Good work fixing up the rest of those issues though. This is a great concept.Yeah, I was just looking through Blue Jays in real life, they have very long Beaks, I tried to make it less rooster, but I still feel I am far from a finished product, I have done the Pen so much with this concept, I know it like the back of my hand now, I appreciate the comment, and thanks! Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted March 7, 2011 Author Share Posted March 7, 2011 I much prefer the shape of the head in the first logo you posted.How so? Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
omnibus Posted March 7, 2011 Share Posted March 7, 2011 Yeah, I liked the first one much better too. All you needed was to fill in between the eye and the top beak a little more, you seemed to reinvent the beak, which was the strong suit of the original. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GriffinM6 Posted March 7, 2011 Share Posted March 7, 2011 Try to incorporate a T in the lower blue part at the back of its head.I like this concept overall. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kw11333 Posted March 7, 2011 Share Posted March 7, 2011 This is so far and above what they have now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rcb05 Posted March 7, 2011 Share Posted March 7, 2011 The bottom part of the blue jay doesn't seem to be working (where the beak flows into the throat). It seems like you've streamlined it to create more "motion" in the logo, but in the process it looks less like an actual blue jay. Also, the seams on the baseball need to be bigger. Right now, with the seams being so small in relation to the size of the ball, it looks more like a softball. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted March 8, 2011 Author Share Posted March 8, 2011 I am working on this but roughly, this is what I believe it may end up looking like, thoughts? I like the new beak, but now that stupid EYE is really tough to figure out. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lights Out Posted March 8, 2011 Share Posted March 8, 2011 I'm not really feeling this. The bird looks unbalanced and skewed when it should be straight, and the eye could be better. POTD: 2/4/12 3/4/12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted March 8, 2011 Author Share Posted March 8, 2011 I'm not really feeling this. The bird looks unbalanced and skewed when it should be straight, and the eye could be better.Yeah I understand, I am trying to shorten the beak, to avoid confusion with other birds, still a work in progress, but after hours of blue jay images, I think I will put a cease on this boy for awhile. Try something a tad different. Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrianVlietDesign Posted March 8, 2011 Share Posted March 8, 2011 After reading most of the comments, I went about updating this today, giving a new wordmark, and to change some slight features, most of which are fairly obvious,Stroke WidthSpacingThe Maple LeafBaseball Rounding.Hopefully this is an improvement to my first and a better revision.This is a fantastic update. NYCFC - MLS CUP CHAMPIONS - 2021 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted March 8, 2011 Author Share Posted March 8, 2011 After reading most of the comments, I went about updating this today, giving a new wordmark, and to change some slight features, most of which are fairly obvious,Stroke WidthSpacingThe Maple LeafBaseball Rounding.Hopefully this is an improvement to my first and a better revision.This is a fantastic update.Thank you very much! Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bmac Posted March 8, 2011 Share Posted March 8, 2011 Wow, the latest update is excellent. The beak looks a million times better. So does the eye area, I think it's almost there. Great work! https://www.behance.net/bmatukewic8043 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
srj34 Posted March 8, 2011 Share Posted March 8, 2011 I like the latest version the best. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeFrank Posted March 8, 2011 Share Posted March 8, 2011 I think the third is goin in a good place but you need the bottom to go backward like the second one. Another thing is on the second, there is a great amount of jagged marks along the bird and leaf, and that is lost in the third. concepts: washington football (2017) ... nfl (2013) ... yikes potd 10/20/12 origin story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rcb05 Posted March 8, 2011 Share Posted March 8, 2011 I'm loving the most recent update. HUGE step in the right direction. The only thing I could see is maybe pushing the backside of the head a bit to the right so that it almost meets the stem of the leaf. However I'd have to see it to know if that really works. Overall, great work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
north dakota Posted March 8, 2011 Share Posted March 8, 2011 I am working on this but roughly, this is what I believe it may end up looking like, thoughts? I like the new beak, but now that stupid EYE is really tough to figure out.This logo is by far the best. I would definitely buy a hat with this logo on it. Woah! You think I'm Cody? My name is Carl Scott Simone and we just happen to share a birthday. BIG DEAL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted March 9, 2011 Author Share Posted March 9, 2011 To all, I think I will likely create a merge of both the 2nd and 3rd update to have a final this weekend more then likely, stay tuned, any more feedback would help in creating a final piece to cherish, thanks to all helping me make my first concept a success! Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vazquez Posted March 12, 2011 Author Share Posted March 12, 2011 After some final time, I created uniforms using the new wordmark font, and keeping a modern update on most of the original logo, I kept the 3rd beak because It was to me more blue jay ish, then also, rebrought back the original head shape, the eye I still will always be undecided, but anyways, thoughts? Behance | Clothing Line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeFrank Posted March 15, 2011 Share Posted March 15, 2011 The logo is good, still not as good as the second in my opinion, but the jerseys are not doing it for me. Bad fonts (name and number), royal, dark, baby blue, there should be a baby blue road uniform... but keep tweaking and you can get a great concept here. concepts: washington football (2017) ... nfl (2013) ... yikes potd 10/20/12 origin story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
boston2012 Posted April 15, 2011 Share Posted April 15, 2011 The Blue jay looks deformed way to streamlined! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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