mattwillcox Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 I've been working on this Bandits scipt for jayjackson3 and I'm looking for any feedback you can give. My main areas of concern are where the the "a" meets the "B" and where the "s" meets the "t". I've got two options so far, but I'm not quite sure which one I like better. Thanks for any feedback you can give. Portfolio Dribbble Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
See Red Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 It looks awkard both ways. Aside from those two issues it's great, but those are two pretty big issues. Can't you just make the red of those letters touch? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lancealot Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 Try putting the t behind the s and IMO the b looks like a r Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
missouri tigers Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 Try having the letters in the problem areas touch eachother like See Red suggested.Looks really promising! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epiphanic Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 The the B/A in the second one is acceptable. The suggestion to have the red parts touch is a good one. If you don't want to go that route, try putting the cross of the T behind the S. "In the arena of logic, I fight unarmed."I tweet & tumble. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McCall Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 Are you using Illustrator? If so, simply move all the white to behind the other colors. Then we can see how the letters currently blocked meet up. But yeah, you don't want the white to be blocking parts of the letters as you have it. The lower corner of the A could be going into the B, with the reds as one and the black outline around both letters as if they were one object. Â Â https://dribbble.com/MakaioCall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pianoknight Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 K E RN I N G 5th in NAT. TITLES | 2nd in CONF. TITLES |  5th in HEISMAN |  7th in DRAFTS |  8th in ALL-AMER  | 7th in WINS  | 4th in BOWLS |  1st in SELLOUTS  | 1st GAMEDAY SIGN Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JayJaxon Posted April 14, 2012 Share Posted April 14, 2012 It seems like you guys have some of the same concerns I had with it. I do love it though and it seems like something that will be an easy fix. Â Â Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
speedy Posted April 14, 2012 Share Posted April 14, 2012 What about flipping the T? So the top bar flows with the I, and the curve is now in line with the S. Does that make any sense? FWIW I can live with the treatment of the "Ba" as it stands. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mattwillcox Posted April 14, 2012 Author Share Posted April 14, 2012 Alright, so I tried connecting the red and it looked a bit strange so I overlapped them with the blue. Portfolio Dribbble Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cody21 Posted April 15, 2012 Share Posted April 15, 2012 I don't like how the S is cut off. fix that, and it's perfection. In the last game against Detroit, the time from ten minutes left to one minute left was probably the longest nine minutes of my life. But from one to zero was probably the greatest time I've ever had. I didn't want the clock to run out. It was such a great feeling: people crying in the stands, people jumping up and down, people cheering. Guys couldn't even sit up on the bench. It was probably the best minute of my life.Ah, the "I'm kidding" - the universal internet excuse for saying something that others perceived as dumb. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Morgan33 Posted April 15, 2012 Share Posted April 15, 2012 I don't like how the S is cut off. fix that, and it's perfection.Agreed. Only thing holding it back Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McCall Posted April 15, 2012 Share Posted April 15, 2012 Alright, so I tried connecting the red and it looked a bit strange so I overlapped them with the blue. If the letters are going to overlap, bring the A in front of the B (it's just the lower corner anyway), an the S in front of the crossbar of the T.What I would probably recommend is group all the red together, then the navy (is that navy?) and the all the white. An they should be layered in that order, red in front then navy then white. The letters that overlap will then look merged with the navy outline going around them. The BA should look fine, but the TS is kind of a wait and see thing. Â Â https://dribbble.com/MakaioCall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JayJaxon Posted April 16, 2012 Share Posted April 16, 2012 I like that idea. The script is almost there. Â Â Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mattwillcox Posted April 18, 2012 Author Share Posted April 18, 2012 Thanks for all of the help guys, I think this might be the final one! Portfolio Dribbble Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DomTheAthlete29 Posted April 18, 2012 Share Posted April 18, 2012 Excellent job Matt! Love the update, hopefully Ill get a custom word mark too Someone be a World Champ, please!Fantasy Football Keeper League.....PM me if you want to join!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cody21 Posted April 18, 2012 Share Posted April 18, 2012 Thats perfection. In the last game against Detroit, the time from ten minutes left to one minute left was probably the longest nine minutes of my life. But from one to zero was probably the greatest time I've ever had. I didn't want the clock to run out. It was such a great feeling: people crying in the stands, people jumping up and down, people cheering. Guys couldn't even sit up on the bench. It was probably the best minute of my life.Ah, the "I'm kidding" - the universal internet excuse for saying something that others perceived as dumb. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Fixer Posted April 18, 2012 Share Posted April 18, 2012 I think the B needs to be connected. If you notice that it isn't, then you see an R and you can't unsee it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DawgPacPBH Posted April 18, 2012 Share Posted April 18, 2012 Or, make the disconnected part of the B go out further to the left. Maybe that would help give the look of a B. peteschwadel.comTwitter: @peteeeeE-Mail: peteschwadel@gmail.comDribbble! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPDesign Posted April 18, 2012 Share Posted April 18, 2012 Flip the crossbar on the top of the T. Make it go down->up instead of up->down. The the top of the S curve will fit nicely under the curve of the T, and the I can easily be adjusted to fit under the other side. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.