Blue Jays Logo Concept

[Nick 1733]

Alright, I figured I should actually put together a logo for my Arena team that was actually a Blue Jay instead of my Cardinal logo. So here's what I've got, I'm putting it up to get some honest C&C to perfect it.

For reference, here's the image I used for reference.

http://www.clipartxp.com/Birds/BLUEJAY.jpg

[LEWJ]

Tell you the truth, IMO, This is flawless, great job!

[LMU]

2 thoughts

1-the lighter blue wedge is a tad too big... it seems forced in there and doesn't seem to flow

2-thin out the outer blue outline around the eye. It makes the bird look like it's wearing glasses

other than that, this is pretty gosh darn awesome.

[Nick 1733]

SECOND VERSION (with LMU's corrections)

[ninersdd]

Both of them are very,very good

[uniguy22]

Very good, but the beak seems to be too big for the rest of the head.

[Nick 1733]

Very good, but the beak seems to be too big for the rest of the head.

Too big in length or too big in heighth, or both?

[Neon_Matrix]

I dunno...something seems to be missing. If you make the rest of the body, or somehow resape where the head ends it would work a little better. While I'm not a fan of the more realistic approach, I still think it is very well done. Try tweaking the neck and you may have a real flawless concept.

EDIT: I now remember what this reminds me of, the Jackle Mask the ancient Eqyptians wore during ceremonies. If you make it less mask like...or human profile like it will be truely awesome!

[The_Admiral]

Yeah, the bottom looks lacking, but otherwise, hey, it's great.

[Nick 1733]

Third Version...

What I did here is I edited the front bottom part of the neck and shortened it, I made the beak smaller.

Now, with the neck, I did the same with the cardinal logo I made and cutting it off made it look worse.

[Nick 1733]

After some tweaking, I made the eye MUCH MORE animal/bird like instead of human like, thanks to comments from my little brother.

[Epiphanic]

In my opinion, I think the latest tweak with the eye is a step backward. If you're intent on having the two-tone eye (which could work I think), you need to make the silver crescent wrap farther around the eye to make the blue "pupil" stand out more. Right now it's just a blob where the eye is supposed to be right now. It's a subtle difference but I think it would make it better. Great job overall.

[TBGKon]

Looks nice Nick, only thing I would do was to make it look a tad meaner (fiercer), like what the AZ Cardinals did with their update, but I'll leave it up to you.

[Audiodrama]

Looks nice Nick, only thing I would do was to make it look a tad meaner (fiercer), like what the AZ Cardinals did with their update, but I'll leave it up to you.

I completely agree...it just doesn't look intimidating at all. Great work thus far though, you have a great base to build upon.

[Gary]

Looks nice Nick, only thing I would do was to make it look a tad meaner (fiercer), like what the AZ Cardinals did with their update, but I'll leave it up to you.

I completely agree...it just doesn't look intimidating at all. Great work thus far though, you have a great base to build upon.

I agree, make it look more fierce, it looks great so far. Can't wait to see the RM Bluejays with a wordmark as well

[AHcreative]

This logo looks really nice. I have to agree with epiphanic, the two toned eye looks better, and it does need to look a little fiercer IMO, other than that this is very nice, a huge improvement from what the Jays have now.

[Nick 1733]

Here's what I've come up with after messing with the eye.

[Roger Clemente]

It's rendered well. My main complaint about this logo is the GIGANTIC CHIN!!!! I would get rid of that bottom left thing altogether.

I also wouldn't use the last eye you made there. It looks too feminine with those faux eyelashes. That little dark blue streak above the eye though, I'd use that.

Just those two changes would make it look much cooler.

--Roger "Time?" Clemente.

[andrewharrington]

A. I think this is too ambiguous in style. It's not all that iconic, but also not terribly detailed. It floats in a middle ground somewhere between 'logo' and 'illustration.' I think you need to choose one or the other and develop it that way instead of trying to tiptoe along this stylistic fence.

B. I think this bird has too many human characteristics. The cheek, the eye, the brow, the forehead, the shoulder. More reference. More research. More sketches.

C. The way the bottom is cut is not very aesthetically pleasing and does not serve any purpose in helping the image. Also, I don't know that the rounded outline is the best choice, here. The light blue highlights on the head make the bird look shiny and plastic.

[The_Admiral]

It's rendered well. My main complaint about this logo is the GIGANTIC CHIN!!!!

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